Haha, oh my.
I actually enjoyed this, and I like Twilight. When I read the title, I was like, "Oh no, it's going to be like all the immature comments that I've heard about Twilight before." But it was actually mildly humorous. It helps that I read the author comments BEFORE watching the movie, else I would've been very confused by it, like the people who don't think it's funny. The length was a problem, but I think the punchline would've been watered down if this were 6 minutes long. The animation could use a little work, but overall, it was pretty good!
That was freaking hilarious.
Oh my goodness. The only criticism I can offer is that you need to work a little more on the graphics, but that was amazing. xD (I'm going to watch it again now.)
Far too short. It was an okay idea, but it just wasn't good enough to be its own standalone flash animation. Maybe if you made a bunch of short clips like that and put them together, or just stuck that in the middle of a flash animation at random... Or something.
Mmmm could do
That made me laugh SO HARD.
It was amazing for a first submission. Some things art-wise could be a little improved. His facial expressions when he woke up and sighed were a little strange, and the overall link drawing was a little sketchy.
But that's all fine, because you did a terrific job. I especially liked when he was like, looking at the camera after putting his hat on. xD He's all, "Yeah, I'm awesome." Haha.
As much as I'd hate to say it, that was actually pretty good. The humor was in the way it seemed like you purposely made that text that way. Like, "ok im bored" and stuff. xD
I see that you're gone or whatever, so I guess this next part is useless, but alas! It is necessary.
Ways you could improve. Sometimes the color of the text offset from the theme of the movie. Also, what was he doing to that boy? It seemed like he was giving it to him up the butt, and I'm not sure that was the case. Make it more clear next time, haha.
Sorry, just wasn't that good.
Graphics need great improvement. Even though you DID have backgrounds, they were very simplistic. Also, the characters seemed to all be very roughly drawn. You can use the optimize settings to reduce that.
The audio was a little annoying. Maybe don't make your characters Alvin and the Chipmunks style. That works for Foamie, but that's pretty much it. The audio seemed very awkward at times, too. Certain things seemed out of place, like the "Oh no, she got me" which followed him/her NOT trying to escape. Also, the music and lack of music combined to make it very boring.
The story completely lacked. There was nothing interesting at all. The only part that actually got a reaction out of me was the end, where he got smacked for NO REASON. You can definitely tell that this piece was made by a girl, and that's not meant in a good way. Most Newgrounds viewers are not interested in painting a slugs face with makeup. All the ideas seemed half-baked, you may want to think harder before you go into animating something next time.
I know you're probably new at animation, so read some tutorials, think really hard, and try again. If you aren't new to animation, you REALLY need to watch/read tutorials.
Sorry for the bad review, but you really need to improve a lot of things.
You misspelled "Copyrighted"
It was okay. You seemed to put effort into it, but the animation lacked as it was poorly drawn. It was very obvious that you used audio clips from the show, and there weren't any backgrounds, really. It wasn't the worst thing that I've ever seen, but it definitely wasn't the best either.
Sorry, I blammed it.
The only reason why was because you credited the wrong artist, and the wrong song title. That song is Tub Thumping by Chubawumba.
Only real flaw.
The end felt too abrupt. It seemed as though something was missing. I really have no suggestions as to how to fix that kind of thing, since it's more of a creative perspective that must just come to you instead of having rhyme or reason, but it was very well put together, and overall was very entertaining.
Oh... Em... Gosh... Ness.
That was terrible! In a good way. Haha. Those are the most inhumane traps EVER! That poor mouse doesn't even get killed, it just lies there until it's demise is brought about. I think this stuff must come to you in everyday experience, huh? You just look at something, and think about "what if that went horribly wrong?" And then shape it in a different way than reality, add the kick, and VIOLA!
If you want to send me your stuff like I requested in the other thing, just send me a message on here and I'll send you my email address. =)
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